Week 4-Finalising Routine

-Hello, Hello. Before I start my act I'd just like to warn those in the audience of the dark nature of my show and would like to just clear up quickly that Rape is no joke
-It's the punchline
-So I'm kinda new to comedy, so I'd like to introduce myself:
-I'm Danny Lambert and my friends often call me 'just abit rape-y'
-Now, rape, it can't be that bad, I mean statistically 9 out of 10 people enjoy gang rape.
-and I know Dark humour isn't everyone's cup of liquidised dead baby...
-but if you expected me to tea, this performance certainly wont be PG.

-Talking of PG, I like to think me and that Monkey Puppet from the adverts are actually quite similar,
-I mean despite making fat, mentally challenged men tea every morning
-It's actually rare we don't have some greasey 40 year old man's hand up our arse

-I try, I try so hard not to be rape-y! but I think it all started last year with my ex....
-we was trying abit of role-playing for the first time, I was positioned like this, and she wanted me to play my father
-I thought it was abit weird but I went with it
-Fucking bitch wasn't happy when I left her for her six year old sister

-I'm so sad we broke up
-She was so great in bed for a six year old

-and you know it's a bad Valentine's Day when the lamppost at the end of the road gets more cards and flowers than you do.

-and you know it's been a worse Valentine's Day when you shoot your super model girlfriend assuming she's an intruder 

-I actually got an accidental Valentine's text, it read:
-Hi honey, on my way home now, can't wait for a special valentines dinner, Love you loads
-kiss, kiss, kiss, kiss, Kiss.
-Aww I thought it was so sweet so being Valentine's Day I thought I'd have a bit of fun so I text back
-Don't bother, I don't love you, you're a cunt and I've have been shagging your eldest daughter.

-Should have seen my Mum's face when she got home.

-About my sister, I think it's a girl thing right, but she always makes it really obvious when she's on her period

-I know because my Dad's cock tastes like blood.

-Anyway,  back to this idea of 'rape-y'. A common misconception is that 
'rape-y' implies that supposedly I rape people
-What my friends are actually implying is that supposedly I'm a racist, perverted, paedophile who often enjoys kidnapping, beastiality, incest and gay sex.
-Oh and don't forget rape

-Now there are two rumours that go 'round why they think this of me:
-One's because my middle name's Joseph and they therefore relate me to Joseph Fritzl who imprisoned his daughters in a dungeon as sex slaves.....good man

-The other's because I hate black people, love watching people I don't know get naked, stole and fucked Madeline in Portugal 2007, as well as shagging 8 dogs, a cat, often my family...in their sleep, and have had 13 prostate exams.... all voluntary

-and not to mention for all the times I've heard "I wouldn't sleep with you if you were the last man on earth"
-Someone has woken up the next morning dazed and confused with my cum dripping slowly out their arse
-Some mornings even two people

-but I honestly don't think being 'rape-y's that bad; it just abit of fun
-Get this, right. Last night I grabbed a woman walking through the same alley I was.
-I put my hand around her mouth, pulled down my trousers and put a gun to her head.
-"Right, your gonna suck my cock" I whispered
-"Try to bite it, I'll blow your head off. Try to fight me off, I'll blow your head off. 
Just do as I say and you won't be harmed"

-She was crying as I shoved her head down, keeping my gun to her head as she sucked to the best of her ability, in order to save her life.
- Then I grabbed her, shoved her against the wall and sucked her tits, biting her nipples, keeping one hand over her mouth, and always with the gun by her head.

-Then I went for the Jack pot, I pulled her underwear down, and fucked her as hard as I could, no empathy for her what so ever
-I knew I was nearly finished so I pulled out and finished myself off, cuming all over her chest and tits
-They were slightly bleeding where I'd been biting.

-Then, before I disappeared into the darkness, I pointed the gun right between her eyes and whispered "Bang"
-I pulled the trigger and I before I knew it, she got proper soaked with my water pistol

-Me and my practical jokes!

-I think most of you in the audience will agree with me here:
-Consent is such a turn off

-but when you think about it...is it even rape if she cums too?
-Is it even rape if you don't wake them up?
-Surely it's not rape if you leave a fiver

-but the real question is...is it even rape if it wags its tail?

-I realise that most comedians aren't like me
-they try to be more relatable with their audiences so I'm gunna see if I can relate with any of the audience members here
-What d'you get if two Muslims hop on the same train you're on?
-Off

-I mean don't get me wrong, I like Muslims, but after feeling suicidal over my bad breakup last year
-I called up the Islamic Samaritans for advice but they just got excited and asked if I knew how to fly a plane

//New Material

-Thank god I don't, any one heard about the missing Malaysian plane in the news?
-I heard that Malaysian authorities are yet to search a yellow object spotted in Vietnamese waters
-Now some people call me racist but I think it was abit of a harsh thing to call a Chinese person. 

-Recently I was mugged by two Chinese blokes on a day trip to London.
-From my description, the police have narrowed it down to around 45,000 people

-It's like trying to play a Chinese version of 'Guess who?'
-Impossible 

-As a kid you're told everything's possible but there are so many impossible things in life, for example:
-Ignoring camel toe after you notice it
-Giving yourself a blowie without breaking a rib....we've all tried
-Stapling diarrhoea to a wall.
- and convincing a girl into anal

-When I was with my ex, I tried to convince her into anal all the time
-but she kept telling me it was literally fucking shit

-During sex I tried to slip it in her arse telling her "The wrong hole" is just a matter of opinion

//Long story *new*

-Finally, 2 months ago I took a girl's anal virginity for the first time.....taking men's was just too easy
-I've known this girl basically all my life since our Mums are really close, and have really had a thing for her. 
-I hit puberty and have tried it on with her ever since, but with no success
-She's always knocked me back saying that I just wasn't right for her

-Anyway. At a family occasion, I thought I'd try it on again, moving my hand slowly along her leg under the table, and this time I was in luck. 
-She wondered into another room so I followed after, there was no one in the room besides us two
-I made my move and before I knew I'd flipped her over and stuck my dick in her arse
-I was pumping away like crazy.
-I couldn't believe it was happening at last.
-After so many years of trying with this girl, and so many years of wanting anal, it was all finally mine
-She was so hot, I'd have loved to have to taken her missionary but I felt I had to go anal
-I mean she's only your cousin from the front

-So there I was, pumping away when suddenly there was a huge crash followed by a  creaky door slinging open
-Shocked, I looked around as fast as possible pulling my trousers up, only to see my whole family staring at us with total disgust and shame etched across their faces.
-It was all my fault
-If I hadn't been pumping away so fast at her arse, maybe my arse wouldn't have accidentally knocked the coffin lid off

-Thank you ever so much for listening, you've been a wonderful audience.
-I hope I haven't offended anyone, if I have, then that's just a bonus
-Good Night everybody

I feel really proud with finalising my routine. Since my last development, I've achieved finding a casual way out of the racist jokes aswell as more one liners and a second long story.

Week 3-Developing the routine

After the constructive criticisms I received, I now want to add a more 'rape-y' aspect to the routine and this fits in perfectly with the usual structure of a comedy performance as they start with one-liners, as first developed, and then go into more of a story. I also found when performing, I swore more than I planned too because it felt casual when working and improvising a little around the material, more like Lee Evan's casual swearing, but I don't think this will be so effective in the long run so I'm going to have to work on timing the swearing right.

//Adapted and developed material from before

-Hello, Hello. Before I start my act I'd just like to warn those in the audience of the dark nature of my show and would like to just clear up quickly that Rape is no joke
-It's the punchline
-So I'm kinda new here, so I'd like to introduce myself:
-I'm Danny Lambert and my friends often call me 'just abit rape-y'
-Now, rape, it can't be that bad, I mean statistically 9 out of 10 people enjoy gang rape.
-and I know Dark humour isn't everyone's cup of liquidised dead baby...
-but if you expected me to tea, this performance certainly wont be PG.

-Talking of PG, I like to think me and that Monkey Puppet from the adverts are actually quite similar,
-I mean despite making fat, mentally challenged men tea every morning
-It's actually rare we don't have some greasey 40 year old man's hand up our arse

-I try, I try so hard not to be rape-y! but I think it all started last year with my ex....
-we was trying abit of role-playing for the first time, I was positioned like this, and she wanted me to play my father
-I thought it was abit weird but I went with it
-Fucking bitch wasn't happy when I left her for her six year old sister

-I'm so sad we broke up
-She was so great in bed for a six year old

-and you know it's a bad Valentine's Day when the lamppost at the end of the road gets more cards and flowers than you do.

-and you know it's been a worse Valentine's Day when you shoot your super model girlfriend assuming she's an intruder 

-I actually got an accidental Valentine's text, it read:
-Hi honey, on my way home now, can't wait for a special dinner, Love you loads
-kiss, kiss, kiss, kiss, Kiss.
-Aww I thought it was so sweet so being Valentine's Day I thought I'd have a bit of fun so I text back
-Don't bother, I don't love you, you're a cunt and I've have been shagging your eldest daughter.

-Should have seen my Mum's face when she got home.

-About my sister, I think it's a girl thing right, but she always makes it really obvious when she's on her period

-I know because my Dad's cock tastes like blood.

//Completely New material below

-Anyway,  back to this idea of 'rape-y'. A common misconception is that 
'rape-y' implies that supposedly I rape people
-What my friends are actually implying is that supposedly I'm a racist, perverted, paedophile who often enjoys kidnapping, beastiality, incest and gay sex.
-Oh and don't forget rape

-Now there are two rumours that go 'round why they think this of me:
-One's because my middle name's Joseph and they therefore relate me to Joseph Fritzl who imprisoned his daughters in a dungeon as sex slaves.....good man

-The other's because I hate black people, love watching people I don't know get naked, stole and fucked Madeline in Portugal 2007, as well as shagging 8 dogs, a cat, often my family...in their sleep, and have had 13 prostate exams.... all voluntary

-and not to mention for all the times I've heard "I wouldn't sleep with you if you were the last man on earth"
-Someone has woken up the next morning dazed and confused with my cum dripping slowly out their arse
-Some mornings even two people

//Long story *also new*

-but I honestly don't think being 'rape-y's that bad; it just abit of fun
-Get this, right. Last night I grabbed a woman walking through the same alley I was.
-I put my hand around her mouth, pulled down my trousers and put a gun to her head.
-"Right, your gonna suck my cock" I whispered
-"Try to bite it, I'll blow your head off. Try to fight me off, I'll blow your head off. 
Just do as I say and you won't be harmed"

-She was crying as I shoved her head down, keeping my gun there as she sucked to the best of her ability, in order to save her life.
- Then I grabbed her, shoved her against the wall and sucked her tits, biting her nipples, keeping one hand over her mouth, and always with the gun by her head.

-Then I went for the Jack pot, I pulled her underwear down, and fucked her as hard as I could, no empathy for her what so ever
-I knew I was nearly finished so I pulled out and finished myself off, cuming all over her chest and tits
-They were slightly bleeding where I'd been biting.

-Then, before I disappeared into the darkness, I pointed the gun right between her eyes and whispered "Bang"
-I pulled the trigger and I before I knew it, she got proper soaked with my water pistol

-Me and my practical jokes!

//Back to one liners *new*

-I think most of you in the audience will agree with me here:
-Consent is such a turn off

-but when you think about it...is it even rape if she cums too?
-Is it even rape if you don't wake them up?
-Surely it's not rape if you leave a fiver

-but the real question is...is it even rape if it wags its tail?

-I realise that most comedians aren't like me
-they try to be more relatable with their audiences so I'm gunna see if I can relate with any of the audience members here
-What d'you get if two Muslims hop on the same train you're on?
-Off

-I mean don't get me wrong, I like Muslims, but after feeling suicidal over my bad breakup last year
-I called up the Islamic Samaritans for advice but they just got excited and asked if I knew how to fly a plane

-Of course I can fly a plane, my Dad's a pilot, I basically grew up in his cockpit 

I think I've defiantly done well to develop this new material but feel like I'm losing direction so I'm going to practice and revise what I've got to check the length, considering, hopefully, there will be pauses for laughs. For my final piece I'd like the routine to go on for about ten minutes but five minutes at the least.

Week 3- Questionnaire Results

Comedy Questionnaire Results

Name: Ali

           Rosie Moore

           Tom Noble

           Anonymous

           Jake Wheeldon

Age:   16

          16

          25

          17

          17

On a scale of 1-10 how funny did you find the performance?

          10

          8

          8

          8

          8

Did you personally find any jokes offensive?

          No

          Not really

          Not really

          No

          No

If Yes, which joke(s) and why?

• ·         It was always funny.
• ·          
• ·          
• ·         All okay for my humour
• ·          

Do you think any of the jokes were taken too far?

          No

          Not really

          No

          Not really

          No

If Yes, which joke(s) and why?

• ·         Just right
• ·         Just be careful, you’re close to the line
• ·          
• ·         They were close but stayed by the line
• ·         I don’t think they were taken far enough #NeedsMoreRacism

Do you feel they were performed well?

          Yes

          Yes

          Yes

          Yes

          Yes

If no or not really, why? How can I improve?  Was this for any particular joke(s)?

• ·          
• ·          
• ·          
• ·          
• ·         Bit more movement can be used

Do you have any further comments or recommendations for improvements?

• ·         Very Good Boy
• ·         Bit longer
• ·         Consider lengthening your performance and link to your “rapey” persona
• ·         That was okay but it might be better without the paper
• Lengthen
• ·         Perform it with props/audience members
• Make it Longer
• More Rape needed

I think the trail of my dark humour comedy went extremely well and I am increasingly asking 'Is there a line in Comedy?' rather than 'What is it to be a Stand Up Comedian?'

Week 3-Questionnaire

Tomorrow I will be performing what I have of the routine so far. As well as filming their reactions, I want to know everyone's opinions and so have created a questionnaire:

Comedy Questionnaire

(Where space is given, even if the question is not relevant to your answer, I would be appreciated if you left relevant remarks leave remarks)

Name:

(can stay anonymous)

Age:

On a scale of 1-10 how funny did you find the performance?

(please circle)

1        2        3        4        5        6        7        8        9        10

Did you personally find any jokes offensive?

Yes              Not really               No

If Yes, which joke(s) and why?

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Do you think any of the jokes were taken too far?

Yes              Not really               No

If Yes, which joke(s) and why?

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Do you feel they were performed well?

Yes              Not really               No

If no or not really, why? How can I improve?  Was this for any particular joke(s)?

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Do you have any further comments or recommendations for improvements?

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Week 2-Developing a routine

Before I start writing my material, I think it's important to have a strong entrance. Most comedians start by welcoming their audience and then move straight into one-liners to warm the audience however as I comedian starting out, I think it's important to introduce myself and especially my ego.

-Hello, Hello. I'm kinda new here, so I'd like to introduce myself:
-I'm Danny Lambert and my friends often call me 'just abit rape-y'
-Now, it can't be that bad, I mean statistically 9 out of 10 people enjoy gang rape.
-and I know Dark humour isn't everyone's cup of liquidised dead baby...
-but if you expected me to tea, this performance certainly wont be PG.

-Talking of PG, I like to think me and that Monkey Puppet from the adverts are actually quite similar,
-I mean despite making fat, mentally challenged men tea
-It's actually rare we don't have some greasey 40 year old man's hand up our arse

-I try, I try so hard not to be rape-y! but I think it all started last year with my ex....
-we was trying abit of role-playing for the first time, I was positioned like this, and she wanted me to play my father
-I thought it was abit weird but I went with it
-The bitch wasn't happy when I left her for her six year old sister

-I'm so sad we broke up
-She was so good in bed for a six year old

-and you know it's a bad Valentine's Day when the lamppost at the end of the road gets more cards and flowers than I do.

-I actually got an accidental text Valentine's Day, it read:
-Hi honey, on my way home now, can't wait for a special dinner, Love you loads
-kiss, kiss, kiss, kiss, Kiss.
-Being Valentine's Day I thought I'd have a bit of fun so I text back
-Don't bother, I don't love you, you're a cunt and I've have been shagging your eldest daughter.

-You should have seen my Mum's face when she got home.

-About my sister, she always makes it really obvious when she's on her period

-my Dad's cock always tastes like blood.

I'm really proud of the material I have come up with so far, especially as it is original and I would like to think fresh. Next week I hope to perform it to the class finding out their reaction and criticisms. 

Week 2-Should I use Dark humour?

I'm contemplating using Dark Humour as I know I enjoy it and my friends enjoy it but I'm not sure what the reaction of strangers will be.
Here are some encouraging reactions from strangers on the BBC website in 2011 after the Tsunami :

When I was a pallbearer for my late brother, I joked about the tune to carry in his coffin into the funeral service. The tune I remembered? He Ain't Heavy He's My Brother. It helped to joke about the event as otherwise it would have been a nightmare of a day. The joke helped lighten a desperately sad day for myself and my family.

Paul G. Chapman, Mapperley, Nottingham

I served for 19 years in the UK military. I completly understand the dynamics of sick humour as it predominates in the armed forces and is, in fact, intrisnic to it. Life is complex, short, unpredictable, and really, quite pointless in many ways. Who wouldn't want to laugh about it?

Garry Harriman, Labrador, Canada

I grew up in an occupied country during World War II. I'm convinced that black humour was the one thing that kept most people going.

Renee Deutsch, The Hague, Netherlands

It's the ones who would censor humour that make me more determined to laugh about things like this. I have no intention to hurt anyone, but I'll be dammed if I'm going to be told what I can and can't joke about.

Big Bad Man, UK

These four justify dark humour however many of the other comments oppose this view, nether the less I think I will use dark humour, as well as a 'rape-y' ego, as I enjoy it and will make sure I perform away from Rainham and to strangers.

Source:"http://www.bbc.co.uk/news/magazine-12775389"

Week 2-Beliefs

To begin to develop a routine, I need to decide from the start, which sort of path I want to take and so what sort of beliefs and techniques I should focus on.

Here are the main techniques I shall use:

• Swearing- Swearing when performing can be comical when well timed and not over used; when over used, the audience may come to expect it which would take away its comedy aspect.
• The un-expectancy- I shall try to be unexpected however this can only come from trying to be witty in my one-liners and often mixing up the elements of the performance throughout.
• Physicality- I think I do this extremely well and so would like to try and be as physical as possible throughout the performance even if this just means, as Lee Evans does, moving around the stage giving the routine energy.
• Voice- Putting on voices can be very comical and can either be used well timed and occasionally, similar to swearing, or as the focus of the routine, as Andy Kaufman started his comedy career. I think I also do this well and saw it work effectively myself when I performed a comical monologue during Ali's lesson/lecture.
• Splatter- If I find something that the audience absolutely like, then I'll try to improvise around that area until it begins to get old because it is more or less guaranteed a good reaction and may warm the audience towards me more getting a better reaction to all my jokes. 

Here are techniques I'm debating on using:

• Dark humour-I love dark humour however I worry I'll only be able to get laughs from a routine if I'm a big name. It also depends on where I'm able to perform; if I'm performing as part of a gallery evening with my family, friends and their parents there (many of whom I know), I worry the effect it will have after the routine. However it could be very effective and could just be used on the side if I feel the audience will warm to it and so in this sense it could be used as part of the splatter effect.
• Ego- It has become very apparent to me that my friends, especially Drama class, think I'm 'rape-y' and so this could be a good ego to play on, especially if I want to use dark humour.

Week 2-Lee Evans

As the other two comedians have covered so many techniques, I would like to finalise my research with Lee Evans. I expect his style to be fast paced  relatable stories with an element of the splatter effect previously explained.

Immediately I notice, when searching on YouTube, Lee Evans has many clips of various lengths all based on his O2 performance which enforces my belief that Lee Evans uses the splatter effect within his routines. When I watch a few of these they are all fast paced relatable stories but I don't want to analyse just a ten minute video on just one story as, if I do perform in the the style, I want to see the transition between stories and what techniques are used in different circumstances.

Lee's entrance is big, and as he starts telling the jokes, he is also very physical in the way he does them; he moves around the stage alot bringing energy into the performance. I start to see that the way Lee transitions between one story to another is almost as if he's thinking about the subject, then is so enthusiastic about it he has to talk about it and goes off in a tangent. There is also an element of one-liners in the routine. He relates with the audience by using 'we' and 'us' pronouns to engage them into his stories. As well as being physical, his voice often changes which adds too the comedy. Lee also subtly swears in his routine which I wouldn't have noticed before, which too adds to the comedy.

To conclude, I realise that in this analysis I have focused completely on techniques rather than the joke's Lee is telling however this is because Lee's jokes are quite similar to many other comedians, what makes Lee successful, in my eyes, is the way he is able to tell them with so much enthusiasm through using his voice and physicality which is something I would definitely like to bring to my routine.

Week 1- Doc Brown

With the idea of timing, I'd like to look at a different type of comedy; music.
Doc Brown is a stand up comedian who uses his culture in rap to explore comedy.

Music allows many different elements to be added to a Stand up routine. The first is 

un-expectancy; the title 'My Proper Tea' has the phonology of 'My Property', this combined with the rap beginning with Doc inviting a friend into his home creates the idea that the rap could be about crime in his home and so when the idea of this extreme is crushed by an anger about the every day making of tea, it Doc gets a positive reaction.

The second element is of timing and physicality; towards the end of his rap, Doc, in time the the music, finishes stirring his tea, un-expectedly shoots his un-reliable friend, and drinks the tea (all done without props or another actor). This too is comical, I think a part of this is because Doc does it so well.

Another element, in my opinion, is Doc's ego and edge as a rapper similarly as Jeremy Lion has an edge as a child's entertainer. Doc Brown is Ben Baily Smith's stage name; Doc I believe is a reference is Doctor Dre, a successful rapper, which adds to the idea of culture within his ego. Brown may also add to the idea of culture as a reference to the colour of his skin with black culture being the roots of rap. Doc Brown is also the name of a character from 'Back to the Future' who is an old scientist which may represent the more delicate side of Doc which is better shown in his rap 'Slang 101' but shown by the fact that he in 'on the fence' in terms of politics, showing no truly strong beliefs in areas that most rap artists do, and that he is only truly angered by the wrong making of tea, something also associated with an old man.

Finally, Doc Brown's 'My Proper Tea' is funny because it's relatable; we make tea almost every day of our lives, for ourselfs, our friends, for some our parents and everybody likes their tea a different way which is why, to some extent, we can relate to Doc for being raged at his Tea not being made right. Me and my girlfriend laugh because we, like Doc says, put the milk in first and so in that aspect it's relatable to us.

To conclude, unlike Doc Brown I have no true culture elements that I think I could manipulate in a routine, except from possibly in my subject areas, and so music may not be an effective element to add to my routine however he does stress to me the idea that I could develop and exaggerate my ego to create a positive reaction.